Faith Shaken

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Photo credit @Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Faith Shaken

Kneeling in deference to the rituals of her youth, “Holy Mary Mother of God,” she prayed, stumbling over the words, searching for a faith that had long eluded her, “surely You, must understand?” The ceiling fan in the hospital chapel rattled in an off-balance cadence; tilting on its axis, much like the grieving mother. No whispered answers, no shroud of peace, no closer to understanding; she rose from the bench and returned to the ICU. Alone with her decision, she nodded yes, it was time to let go. The machinery stopped.

In the silence that followed, her child reached the light, a guiding Mother’s hand ensuring safe passage.

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51 responses to “Faith Shaken

  1. Heart-wrenching story! Trust in a kinder immortal mother must have allowed the mortal mother to let go.

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  2. Gave me chills. Good work!

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  3. Well written, heartfelt journey. Love the description ‘off-balance cadence; tilting on its axis, much like the grieving mother’.

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  4. That tugged at the heartstrings. I guess she knew it was time.

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  5. I would guess a decision like that would be the hardest ever to take.. loosing a child.. so sad and so well written.

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  6. Wow! Excellent! Filled with emotion and tension. The end was so sad, but you also made it beautiful.

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  7. I can not imagine….but your story helps me to.

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  8. somehow a mother must know it was time to let go.

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  9. Dear Tracey,

    This one brought tears.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  10. Hard enough to lose a mother, but devastating to lose a child. Well told. 🙂

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  11. Been there. Done that. Still wondering if I did the right thing.

    DJ

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  12. I could picture it so vividly. Losing a child is certainly one of the things that can shake one’s faith.

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  13. Such a very sad story, such a difficult decision.

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  14. Oh my, I can hear the weighty groan of the unsteady fan and feel the heaviness of the grieving mother’s heart. Poetically written.

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  15. I loved the line about the out-of-balance fan. A perfect fit for the emotions swirling during that situation. Faith is a difficult thing to wrap one’s mind around. Even us believers have doubts. However, hope is what delivers comfort and and your last line gave us that freedom to let go.

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    • Russell,
      Your comment gave me pause to reflect so I re-read my other stories about human suffering. I do have a tendency to leave the reader with hope and I avoid writers who leave me feeling hopeless. “Hope is what delivers comfort.” I have faith in that.
      Thank you,
      Tracey

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  16. So many wonderful touches to your story, Tracey. The imagery works so well to convey the mother’s state of mind. A really moving scene.

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  17. I can’t imagine having to make that difficult decision as a mother. What a heart-wrenching story. Well done.

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  18. Sometimes letting go is all that’s left to do for a loved one. Such a heartbreak of a story, and an imaginative take on the prompt. Great!

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  19. Sad. Just how does one make decisions like that?

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  20. The last gift you can give is the hardest. Heart-wrenching, and you told it so well.

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  21. A realistic story, told with such compassion. Lovely.

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  22. Very sad story, such a terrible and difficult decision to have to make.

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  23. I like that you didn’t end your story in death, but in answered prayer.

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  24. A sad, gentle story with a happy ending even though the mother hasn’t realized. It would be so heartbreaking to finally come to the acceptance you have to let go of a loved one. It would especially tear at the heart of a mother to let her child go. Lovely story, Tracey,and so well written. — Suzanne

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