The Last of You, #Friday Fictioneers

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Photo Credit – EmmyLGant

 

The Last of You
“The last dregs of you; a few ashes and bone chips left in a ziplock bag.
A shame that you couldn’t enjoy the view in one piece, but it is a Parisian ashtray. Don’t be ungrateful.”

“I didn’t do it just for the money. Although, I suppose I will get used to first class: the champagne and caviar, such a nice touch really.”

“Now Darling, you mustn’t keep me. I have another engagement.”

“What’s that you say?”

“Of course I couldn’t have done it alone, I’m weak and worthless. Isn’t that what you always said?”

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Here are the remains of my Friday Fictioneers offering. I’m a bit dusty having written nothing of substance for two months whilst living in a small Mexican village on the Sea of Cortez. The Internet is sketchy at best so please except my apologies for not posting or commenting. I will be moving my writing to another blog in the near future to separate it from my health blog. Please stay tuned and when it goes live, I hope you’ll follow me@ http://www.traceydelaplainmd.com

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47 responses to “The Last of You, #Friday Fictioneers

  1. pursuitofanewadventure

    I love Mexico! How beautiful. Hope you’re enjoying yourself!

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  2. Such a cunning tale, Tracey. Great stuff.

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  3. I wondered where you’d been!! I hope you’ve had a great time x

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  4. Tracey, I’m a bit miffed by the Parisian ashtray bit. Maybe I need more coffee. Otherwise and intriguing tale of murder, I suspect.

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  5. Dear Tracey,

    Great to see you back.
    I’ll admit that I’m a bit confused. Is this two people talking? Or is it the murderer speaking to the bones of the victim? If it’s one person then you only need quotation marks at the beginning and end of the piece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Hi Rochelle,
      It’s one crazy murderer. I tried it with one set of quotations but I wanted to show her hesitate as if she thought the ashes were talking back. I took a chance, I’m a rebel. Glad to be back and writing. Thank you for the input.
      I’m really missing my outdoor lap pool since it snowed here today in Nevada.
      Tracey

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  6. It’s been a long time since I read something from you. Beautiful pics…looks like an idlyllic life down in Mexico. Good monologue.

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  7. Has madness taken her over, an interesting take on the photo.

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  8. what? she’s talking to herself again? hurry, she needs help.

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  9. You actually made me feel sorry for that guy. Actually I think that guy might be me, but I would stop short of murder and probably leave it as a really strong, aggressive “got your nose!” Well written as always, you’re back in the saddle!

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  10. I hope she comes back to visit “him”, she seems to be having a nice chat 🙂 Though I guess he’ll be in a landfill fairly soon.
    I’m imagining her with slightly crazy eyes…
    Great story!

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  11. She seems quite contented with her lot now. Nicely done. And happy homecoming – I enjoyed your photos on FB.

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  12. Nice writing, but I’m a bit confused. Is it one person speaking? Wouldn’t it then just be one set of speech marks with pauses in between?

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  13. You must be careful when talking to ashes, they may start talking back. Going first class? Wow, he must have had some life insurance policy.

    So why are you in Mexico? You’re not on the lam, are you?

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  14. Good story – you can have listening sentient ashes any time you like as far as I’m concerned – it’ all keeps us in our toes!
    But what I’m really hoping is that Mr Edwards will pop up down there in Mexico and jump onto (and off) the page – my own theory about your temporary absence was you’d run away with him.

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  15. Murder and revenge. That’s an excellent way to come back! I’ve missed you, Tracey. Those pictures are absolutely gorgeous. I’ve enjoyed them all on Facebook. x

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  16. Too me two reads to understand but I liked that the story made me stop and think. Great job!

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  17. Weak and worthless.
    Love it!

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  18. Hearing about ash and bones in Parisian settings make me think of crazy terrorists…

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  19. What stunning photos. It looks gorgeous there.

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  20. Beautiful scenery in Mexico, Tracey. I understood the dialog as one person, the murderer. it sounds like she’s gone over the edge. Well done. —- Suzanne

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  21. oh. this is mad. and morbid.

    [@rosemawrites] from
    A Reading Writer

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